Once there was a great assassin who was feared by everyone in a small town called Markent.He could kill from a great distance, then flee before is victim hits the ground.His weapon of choice was always a sniper, but if was at close range it would be a knife.He became a threat to the police when he wouldn't let the police do there job.
When his son was killed by thugs, thats when he take matters into his own hands.He would never rest until he found his sons killers, and bring justice to all and bring to their town. One night as he was at home from his night job he got a phone call in the middle of the night. The person had spoke in a deep voice and had said his son was still alive. He was in shock. The assassin could not believe what he just heard. He said , it couldn't be true because he saw my son die in cold blood, and had buried him last year.The man on the phone said.
"If you want to see your son again you will do jobs for me."
He didn't know what to believe so he just agreed to do it if he really had is son.The man put his son on the phone to prove he had really had his son. Then the man said.
"You will receive a call in 24 hours."
The next night he had gotten the phone call.Their was hardly any conversation the man got right to the point.His first task was to take out the head of the Japanese mob boss. He took the task. As soon as the assasain went to the place he immediately took out his target.No one seen a thing.He would kill night after night.His plan was to not kill them but to interrogate them.he thought by doing this he would become closer to his real target and get his son back.
Review:
This story's background is great. It gives you a brief analysis of the main character and his call to adventure. Also it has good transitions from scene to scene. On the other hand it could have been longer. It also could have left the reader not knowing if he saved his son. It had a few grammatic errors. But overall it was a great story and I enjoyed reading about the skillful sniper.
When his son was killed by thugs, thats when he take matters into his own hands.He would never rest until he found his sons killers, and bring justice to all and bring to their town. One night as he was at home from his night job he got a phone call in the middle of the night. The person had spoke in a deep voice and had said his son was still alive. He was in shock. The assassin could not believe what he just heard. He said , it couldn't be true because he saw my son die in cold blood, and had buried him last year.The man on the phone said.
"If you want to see your son again you will do jobs for me."
He didn't know what to believe so he just agreed to do it if he really had is son.The man put his son on the phone to prove he had really had his son. Then the man said.
"You will receive a call in 24 hours."
The next night he had gotten the phone call.Their was hardly any conversation the man got right to the point.His first task was to take out the head of the Japanese mob boss. He took the task. As soon as the assasain went to the place he immediately took out his target.No one seen a thing.He would kill night after night.His plan was to not kill them but to interrogate them.he thought by doing this he would become closer to his real target and get his son back.
Review:
This story's background is great. It gives you a brief analysis of the main character and his call to adventure. Also it has good transitions from scene to scene. On the other hand it could have been longer. It also could have left the reader not knowing if he saved his son. It had a few grammatic errors. But overall it was a great story and I enjoyed reading about the skillful sniper.
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